GTEC(basic)：実際の採点でGrade4に分類された英作文を比較する
GTEC の英作文でGrade４に分類された英作文を二つ紹介したいと思います。
Grade４は、スコア換算で１００～１３０の間ですが、今日はその最低限に近いもの（１０５点）と最高点に近いもの（１２４点）の英作文を取り上げたいと思います。これぐらいの作文がGTECではこういう点数になるんだなぁと参考にして頂ければと思います。
１０５点の英作文
お題
「地域をきれいにするためにできること」
I think that we grow flowers for our town let become crear, I have two reasons about this. First, Flowers make us happy, and they are looked nice.
Second, Flowers are said that let decrease crimes. we can our town become safty.
So, I think that we grow flowers for our town let become crear.
（５５語）
Second, Flowers are said that let decrease crimes. we can our town become safty.
So, I think that we grow flowers for our town let become crear.
（５５語）
採点
I think that we can grow flowers to make for our town let become crear, I have two reasons for about this. First, Flowers make us happy, and they look are looked nice.
Second, Flowers are said that let decrease crimes . we can make our town safe become safty.
So, I think that we can plant grow flowers to make for our town let become crear.
Second, Flowers are said that let decrease crimes . we can make our town safe become safty.
So, I think that we can plant grow flowers to make for our town let become crear.
赤：加えられた表現
青：スペルや、大文字小文字、単純な時制などの間違い
紫：読み手に伝わらない文
結果
意見 〇
理由 〇
語彙 2.5 / 8
文法 2.0 / 8
構成、展開 2.0 / 8
→スコア 105 / 160
→GRADE 4
理由 〇
語彙 2.5 / 8
文法 2.0 / 8
構成、展開 2.0 / 8
→スコア 105 / 160
→GRADE 4
語彙数も少ないし、文法的な間違いも多いのですが一応ギリギリ１００点を超えたのでGrade4 です。この語数ですと解答用紙の半分も埋まりません。GTECの英語力レベルの表によると「Grade4 ＝高校英語中級レベル」（海外ホームステイや語学研修で楽しめるレベル）です。まあ、「海外で楽しむくらい」はできるかな？
訂正が入ったところを直した解答例
Flowers are said that let decrease crimes .
と書かれているところは、おそらく「花は犯罪を減らすと言われている」と言いたいのだと思います。
●「～と言われている」は
It is said that~ もしくは ~ is / are said to do のどちらかで表現できます。ここでは
〇 It is said that flowers ~.
〇 Flowers are said to ~.
✖ Flowers are said that これは、二つの使い方が混ざってしまっていますのでNG
●「犯罪を減らす」は decrease crimes でも良いですが、decrease は「減る」という自動詞で使われることが多いです。一般的に「減らす」として使われている reduce を使った方が「よく見る表現」になります。let は「使役動詞」的に使っていると思いますがここでは「使役」にする必要はありませんので、不要です。
Flowers are said that let decrease crimes .
→It is said that flowers reduce crimes.
訂正が入った所を全て直した解答例
I think that we can grow flowers to make our town clean. I have two reasons for this. First, flowers make us happy, and they look nice. Second, it is said that flowers reduce crimes . We can make our town safe. So, I think that we can plant flowers to make our town clean.
１２４点の英作文
お題
「地域をきれいにするためにできること」
I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town.
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We are relaxed by flowes' smels. And the town can be colorful!!
Second, flowers' bleth is very clean. We make dirty ear everyday, but flowers' bleth clan them. So the town keeps flesh ear.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town. We should clean the my town everyday!!
(90 語）
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We are relaxed by flowes' smels. And the town can be colorful!!
Second, flowers' bleth is very clean. We make dirty ear everyday, but flowers' bleth clan them. So the town keeps flesh ear.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town. We should clean the my town everyday!!
(90 語）
採点
I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town.
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We are relaxed by flowes' smels. And the town can be colorful!!
Second, flowers' bleth is very clean. We make the air dirty ear everyday, but flowers' bleth clan them. So the town keeps the air fresh flesh ear.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town. We should clean the my town everyday!!
(90 語）
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We are relaxed by flowes' smels. And the town can be colorful!!
Second, flowers' bleth is very clean. We make the air dirty ear everyday, but flowers' bleth clan them. So the town keeps the air fresh flesh ear.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning to the town. We should clean the my town everyday!!
(90 語）
赤：加えられた表現
青：スペルや、大文字小文字、単純な時制などの間違い
紫：読み手に伝わらない文
青：スペルや、大文字小文字、単純な時制などの間違い
紫：読み手に伝わらない文
結果
意見 〇
理由 〇
語彙 3.5 / 8
文法 3.0 / 8
構成、展開 3.5 / 8
→スコア 124 / 160
→GRADE 4
理由 〇
語彙 3.5 / 8
文法 3.0 / 8
構成、展開 3.5 / 8
→スコア 124 / 160
→GRADE 4
語彙数も十分ありますし、理由をサポートする文章も充実していますね。文法的に正しく言えず「言いたいことが正確に言えなかった」という感じでしょうか。
訂正が入った所を直した解答例
flowers' bleth is very clean.
という表現が意味不明と判断されました。おそらく「花は空気を綺麗にする（二酸化炭素を吸って酸素を出すから）」と言いたかったのでしょう。
→flowers make the air clean.
（花は空気を綺麗にする）
が一番簡単な言い方ですね。主語を「花の呼吸（息）」と言わなくても「花」で通じます。二酸化炭素や酸素の事を言いたければ
→ flowers breathe in carbon dioxide and breathe out oxygen.
(花は二酸化炭素を吸い込み、酸素を吐き出します）
● breathe は「呼吸をする」という動詞です。breathe in 「吸い込む」breathe out「吐く」です。「息」と言う名詞 breath とはスペルも音も違うので注意です！
訂正が入った所を全て直した解答例
I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning the town.
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We can be relaxed by smells of flowers. And the town can be colorful!!
Second,flowers can make the air clean. We make the air dirty every day, but flowers breathe in carbon dioxide and breathe out oxygen. So the town can keep the air fresh.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning the town. We should clean our town every day!!
I have two reasons.
First, flowers are very beautiful. If there are many flowers in the town, we can relax. We can be relaxed by smells of flowers. And the town can be colorful!!
Second,flowers can make the air clean. We make the air dirty every day, but flowers breathe in carbon dioxide and breathe out oxygen. So the town can keep the air fresh.
For these reasons, I think it is important to grow flowers for cleaning the town. We should clean our town every day!!
※文の冒頭が And や So で始まっているところには訂正が入っていませんでしたので、そのままにしてあります。
こちらもどうぞ↓
同じGrade 4 でもこれだけ作文の内容が違いますので、あまりGradeにはこだわらず、点数ベースで自分の実力を把握しておくことも大切ですね。
